”Once upon a time I was falling in love, but now I’m only falling apart.”
Your touch turned me to glass
fragile and breakable
rippled like a flaw
bubbled and shatterable.
And you would slowly keep knocking
harder each time
after the first soft smooth run of the palm
and a wash with the water of the eyes.
Then the last knock was a hit
- hard and rough but a sure shot.
Like a gun-shot well aimed
at the heart of a glass figurine,
that never bled but the cracks
shattered into a million shards,
scattered and spread everywhere.
The bang of the hammer still resonates the air.
Very evocative writing – hope you are OK?
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No one knows the source of joy.
A poet breathes into a reed flute,
and the tip of every hair makes music.
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Rumi – from ‘The Source of Joy’
April 26, 2012 at 3:39 pm
April 26, 2012 at 4:25 pm
Seems it was quite harsh and this post seems so in pain.Very good work with the words and images.
April 27, 2012 at 6:23 pm
Thank you Alcina. Yeah though now I have gone numb to the pain, I still know the raw skin within my soul.
April 29, 2012 at 8:30 am
“The bang of the hammer still resonates the air.”
Like the lingering note of a sad, sad song that you still hear long after the singer has left the stage. I felt this, Purvi, beautifully, achingly done.
April 30, 2012 at 7:15 pm
Raivenne, you connected so beautifully to this post! Thanks a lot for this review of my poem. <3
May 1, 2012 at 3:06 pm
Beautiful yet sad …thank you .. unfortunately the pictures didn’t appear but saying that the poem stood really well by it self x
April 30, 2012 at 10:08 pm
Awwww :/ I choose and put in pictures with so much care, the effort and time is all wasted if my readers don’t get a loook! bad bad WordPress :’/ But am at peace that my poem did it all .. thanks a bunch for the great feedback.!
May 1, 2012 at 2:05 pm
Lovely love poem, I love it.
April 30, 2012 at 11:43 pm
Thanks a tonne for dropping by and connecting to both of my blogs. Feels great to get peer appreciation like this
:)
May 1, 2012 at 2:03 pm
Nice words expressing, love it
May 2, 2012 at 6:58 pm
Thanks so much!
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May 3, 2012 at 2:18 pm
Well written, full of honesty and evocative. I love the words you’ve used
May 4, 2012 at 1:00 pm
Thankyou so much for your versatile feedback. AM so glad you liked it so much
May 4, 2012 at 2:33 pm
sorry for the delayed comments ………..beautifully expressed the fragile feel……..thank God i really got the chance or else i wud ve missed the beautiful piece………n finally same thing i wud repeat u cud pen my heart words.
August 11, 2012 at 3:54 am
It is always a moment of smile when even an older post gets the reads from the best of my readers. Thanks sweets. <3
August 11, 2012 at 2:54 pm